Watch That First Step

27th Sep 2013, 7:00 AM
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Watch That First Step
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bbedlam 27th Sep 2013, 7:00 AM edit delete
bbedlam
I had a lot of fun drawing that cliff-face in the second panel. Lots of little noodling and cross hatching with a school nib pen. Fun!

Hopefully the last panel conveys that the stone elemental has gone over the edge of the cliff. In previous pages I've shown that they're actually above some of the cloud cover, but I'm afraid it may look like he's hurtling upwards. In retrospect I possibly should have done a worms-eye view of him falling, but I still think this works well to show AF' reaction. Opinions?
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Brighid 27th Sep 2013, 2:02 PM edit delete reply
I thought he appeared to take a dive over the cliff. And geez, look at Faerie's expression!
bbedlam 27th Sep 2013, 2:41 PM edit delete reply
bbedlam
@Brighid - well come on.. even AF has her little freak out moments. If someone jumping off a mountain doesn't freak you out, what will?
Spikes 27th Sep 2013, 7:44 PM edit delete reply
Ok I like him. Hes hardcore.
bbedlam 29th Sep 2013, 7:58 PM edit delete reply
bbedlam
@Spikes - I like him/her too. Takes a very direct approach to problems.
Muchacho NL 28th Sep 2013, 6:56 AM edit delete reply
Muchacho NL
I think it's all in the action lines.
Have you tried playing with them to see how they'd show what you wanted us to show?

I think if you remove the bottom few, that would stop making it look like he's suddenly really tiny and jumping upwards.

You could shift the textballoon down, and make a little crumbling patch at the top right cliff, some small rocks coming loose, as if he'd jumped off and it gave in under is weight a bit.
bbedlam 29th Sep 2013, 7:59 PM edit delete reply
bbedlam
@Muchacho NL - I did play around with the speed lines and thought this looked like a good version. Then I uploaded it and wasn't so sure. Your suggestions about do little crumbling patches is a good one and something I'll have to keep in mind for the next time something along these lines comes up.
aqua 29th Sep 2013, 5:39 AM edit delete reply
sucker, flying is for people who can't jump off cliffs!
bbedlam 29th Sep 2013, 7:59 PM edit delete reply
bbedlam
@Aqua - darn tootin'!
BittenUsagi 5th Oct 2013, 3:31 AM edit delete reply
You can definitely tell he's jumping off a cliff and that last panel is hilarious! Love it.
bbedlam 5th Oct 2013, 2:39 PM edit delete reply
bbedlam
@BittenUsagi - Glad you're able to tell he's leaping down and not up. I should have figured out another way to draw it, but at least most people found it fairly obvious.